GRE Prompt #1 - Step Down

In attempt to nourish my writing skills and prepare for the GRE, I decided to go over some practice prompts.  There's limited editing and the writing is timed, so hopefully I'll see an improvement by my test date. =] If anyone is actually reading this, please feel free to critique or offer further examples. I could use all the helpd I could get =}

Scoring guide : 

Score 6

In addressing the specific task directions, a 6 response presents a cogent, well-articulated analysis of the issue and conveys meaning skillfully.

A typical response in this category:

• articulates a clear and insightful position on the issue in accordance with the assigned task
• develops the position fully with compelling reasons and/or persuasive examples
• sustains a well-focused, well-organized analysis, connecting ideas logically
• conveys ideas fluently and precisely, using effective vocabulary and sentence variety
• demonstrates facility with the conventions of standard written English (i.e., grammar, usage and mechanics), but may have minor errors

Issue Prompt #1: 

In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should be required to step down after five years.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

       In this passage, the speaker asserts that there should be a limit to the length of time one remains in power. Indeed, in positions of power, it is often necessary for the power to be handed over—if and when, however, requires some qualifications.   For example, when after in a position for five years, matters seem worse—promises are not kept, the economy remains in a downturn with no foreseeable rise, or a business is reaching its nadir—it may be necessary to abdicate the position.  However if the situations appear to improve, notably at the hands of higher-ups, it would be a bit unnecessary to give up power. 

                As the U.S. system is currently set, elections for president are held every four years.  The selection of president depends largely on voters, a form of democracy that allows for those who are affected by the changes of power and government mandates to decide who the next successor is.  If they feel the previous president’s promises have come to fruition, they can vote to keep the current president. On the other hand, if they feel another individual would do a better job, they have the option to attempt to put that person in power.   We can see how the impacts of the voting system, and more importantly, the condition of the economy had affected a position of power if we look at the case President Roosevelt, who was elected for 4 terms. However, limits are now placed that a position not be held for over 8 years. One can argue that some governmental policies may not take full effect for a decade or more. For such policies or future endeavors  it would necessary to break them down into details. For example, analyzing the effects of exporting gas and producing alternative fuels, and how changes now will potentially effect 2020, when population is increased and demands are at its highest. In such circumstance, extensive research may prove that the current power holders may actually be making a long-term positive effects. 

Similar systems hold true for businesses and education as well, but appear to have less stern limits. Many school or business presidents have held positions for over 8 years. Many systems are not up to the same democratic standards as the government—very often, not everyone has a say.  Typically, there is a system of checks and balances to ensure that those in power are warranted such control. This can prove beneficial when individuals follow policies and provide growth for the company or educational system, however, all too often, corruption can ensure and those in power are deposed.  Without the proper control on power, issues tend to arise. For example, without democracy in North Korea, we see the effects of late Kim Jong-il  and how sheltered and malnutrition the majority of the citizens are.  In this severe case, it would undoubtedly be necessary for  Jong-il to step down.  On the other hand, the successful Bill Gates has been in power of Microsoft for over 20 years, and warrants no need to give up his power.

Another instance when stepping down would be beneficial is if the government, business or other system is at a standstill.  For economic growth and productivity, one can see the benefit of having new insights on current and potential problems, as well as the development of new policies and renovations. Oftentimes, it is said that the key to success is revitalization through leadership.  It would give an opportunity for the youth or simply new individuals to develop something new and upcoming, shine a light on current situations that need to be fixed, or offer alternative insights and methods to solving different problems.

Overall, one could see the benefits of the veteran as well as a new leader.  However, misuse of power or inexperience can both be a downfall for either case.  Handing over power could be disastrous if situations are fruitful, or quite necessary for in times of desperation.  The time limit, however  is definitely relative to the position and the policies, as changes may not take place within a 5 year window.  Qualifications must exist in order to choose the best path of choice. 

Too Thin of a Slice

       One thing that I’ve always prided myself in is the ability to judge one’s character. It’s not to say I have some prolific capacity to asses an individual’s character without any doubt. Nor do I mean I will act accordingly to every assumption I make, as it is only an assumption whether or not I have substantial backing. We are often grounded in this idea that “we shouldn’t judge a book by its cover.” Oftentimes, we do it anyways and rebut that it is frequently necessary. There is a lot that we can learn about someone within 15 seconds that some people can’t pick up on over years of acquaintance.  Some call it “thin slicing.”  However, I believe there is much validity to this commonly rejected aphorism. 

      Over years, we come to pick up on particular characteristics that, I don’t want to necessarily say define people, but often gives us an insight into their personality. A flaw to this is that I feel that we pick up, or maybe simply remember, the bad more than the good. ( Err..I feel like this is the case for many things…) This is what I believe leaves people jaded. In attempt to avoid this, I’ve made the conscious effort to give people the benefit of the doubt. One of the best decisions I’ve ever made. Personally, I’m not big on cutting anyone out of my life. I’m not saying I’m not selective—there are always those certain people in life that you would do better without. However, we’ve all come to realize that no one is perfect—we all have our flaws, our “moments” or “phases” that we go through—and we can’t always understand where someone is at in their life.

      On a similar note, I also feel that even if romantic feelings were once involved, people could still be friends (depending on certain terms, of course).   It is not that I’m naïve or in denial or simply missing some bigger picture or anything.  It’s a choice I consciously make after careful consideration.  I’m wise enough to know that putting everything on the table doesn’t really mean anything (aside from potentially ridding yourself of any foreseen guilt trip).  However, if I believe the friendship is important enough to me, it’s something I’m willing to handle. A lot of what life comes down to is what you’re willing to handle….

       There is a sense of freedom I feel from simply being uninhibited by our preconceived notions or expectations.  As I’ve always said, it’s one thing to be prepared for the worst, but always expect the best.  I believe it gives us a less negative outlook on life. Its gives us an unattenuated ability to feel.

Year in Review- 2010

A Lighter Shade of Gray

So encumbered by a world that insists on constricting individuals into well defined categories, we often tend to forget the duality of the human character. We are not strictly good or evil, sinners or saints, but simply different shades of gray--yet I keep trying to fit myself into this all-restricting white. I've often spoke of being so conflicted by this cognitive dissonance that just eats away at me, but its something we all face and often don't realize how simple it is. We cannot merely disjoin the wrongs and rights of our actions--we'll soon find ourselves in a mess of excuses and compromising.  It's a futile attempt to try and breakdown our every intention, every reason or every excuse we make. I just end up beating down on myself, which solves nothing. It's one thing to acknowledge your wrongdoings, but another dwell on it.  We are often well aware that we are our own greatest critics-- this serves us well by keeping us in line, and reminding us that the world doesn't see us half as bad as we do. However, what good is being a critic if we have no better plan? 

A Tribute to Lukas Dunphy

You wrote of angels on earth with hidden wings--those tested to their wit's end for the potential they possess,to motivate and inspire.You spoke from a place of knowing; connecting beyond mere intuition or perception, but rather, through manifesting nothing less than would a godsend. And even now, from a place unseen, through words untold, you're inspiration is still strong enough to illuminate even the darkest of nights. Even though you're not around, Luke, I am listening. 

I graduate on Friday--all thanks to you. You not only gave me a second chance at life, but provided me with the inspiration I lacked when I had no confidence in myself; the courage I needed before I realized that there is nothing to lose;the patience and strength when I knew there would be a long uphill road ahead of me, and most importantly, a friend who is always by me, which of whom I can speak to when the world seems to crash down with all it's fury. You give me unparalleled motivation, simply knowing you saw potential in me. And because of you, I am invincible.